Can I have some advice for the short story I'm writing part 2

“That’s pretty, would you like to hang out? I don't mind much at all”



My smile grew from ear to ear happily. I nodded, dropping the book I happened to have in my hands excitedly and signed back at her that I would love to if she doesn't mind. Kamari smiled brightly and took her phone out and showed me her number. Shocked, I just looked at her then back at the phone. Hands shaking heat rising my heart beating louder then the drums in a rock band i took my phone out adding her to my contacts

For hours we talked, getting to know each other. I grew close to her talking to her day to day texting and meeting up at the library. It seemed just too unreal. Could this be what it's like to fall in love? I would wonder every time we went our separate ways.

I felt the need to tell her how I felt. Never feeling this way before, I was somewhat excited yet nervous. Brushing my fingers gently past each person in my phone I got to Kamaris finally and typed ‘meet me at the coffee shop next to the bookstore later at 2 please’ hesitantly sending it. I threw my phone across the room and dropped on the ground once again my heart raced. I could barely stay still. Pacing around i waited to see a slight vibration on my phone to indicate i got a text back

Hours past and i didnt get a text back i sighed thinking maybe she is just gonna go there and not text back. Quickly I grabbed my phone and the coat I needed for winter and dashed out the door. Pushing back the other people in my way I felt the air brush on my cheek and a chill down my spine. Nevertheless I would not let that hold me back. Faster and faster ran soon sliding a bit and tripping as soon as I got to the coffee shop.

i got up and looked around i pacied around paranoid 'were is she?' i thought to myself sighing i walked over to a free table and sat down still waiting for kamari i checked our texts and nothing no responce i could feel a slight knot in my throat and tears fill my eyes

i was just to silly to believe that she would ever love me dropping my head on the table i slowly drifted into a depressed like stage tears dripping down my cheeks i couldnt take it were was she? why was i this dense? it was just a trap all along i knew it! love is just for the weak hearted! biting my lip i sobbed more and more starting to have to gasp for air filled with anger and sadness not knowing what to do i gave up about to leave

¨hey cat sorry im late¨ i heard that familiar voice from behind that beautiful angelic voice i heard it again thank the gods i quickly turned around with a sniffle and wiped my eyes and nose no longer crying a bright innocent smile grew on my face as i waved ¨uh cat, i have something to tell you-¨
i tilt my head confused and somewhat anxious that angelic voice seemed a bit shaky and scared or nervous i felt a bit of worry from myself i signed back to her ¨ whats up kamiri? is something wrong?¨

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Answer 1

Answer:

It has a nice tone to it and a good story line keep up the writing

Explanation:

Answer 2

Answer: it's good! maybe you could change the "Hands shaking heat rising my heart beating louder then the drums in a rock band i took my phone out adding her to my contacts" to " Hands shaking, heat rising, and my heart  beating louder than the drums in a rock ban, I retrieved my phone phone from my pocket and added her contact.

Explanation:

just needed some clarification there.  there are a few more gramatical errors/ places that need commas for clarification, but I don't have time rn. overall though, I think the concept of your short story is brilliant :)


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Fill in the blanks with the
correct form of the verbs given
in the brackets.
1. The police....................... four
thieves last night, (catch)
2. ............... ........ food when
he came in. (cook)
3. It..................... at 9 o'clock,
(rain)
4. I certainly would
have..................... my colleague
if I had been there, (help)
5. Stars............... in the sky
at night, (twinkle)
6. All the students.................
the class work when the
teacher came in. (do)
7. Mahesh...........
tomorrow from Patna, (come)
8. The patient.......... ..... before
the doctor came, (die)
9. I saw that the
policemen.............. the
thieves, (chase)
10. He is a very rude person, I
him. (not help)​

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1. caught
2. was cooking
3. rained
4. helped
5. twinkle
6. did
7. is coming
8. had died
9. chased
10. won’t help
1. catches
2. He cooked
3. rains
4. helped
5. twinkle
6. do
7. comes
8.died
9. chased
10. I’m not helping him

What does Ralph consider doing? In lord of the flies chapter 5

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Ralph calls the assembly and reminds everyone of their agreement to maintain fresh water supplies, observe sanitation measures, build shelters, and keep the signal fire going

how might Edgar Allan Poe have influenced other writers who came after him? Give specific examples.​

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Explanation:

His use of psychological horror through first-person narration would inspire other writers such as Ambrose Bierce and H.P. Lovecraft to write horror stories. Although Edgar Allan Poe began his literary career as a poet, he quickly recognized the demand for short fiction.

Which work best describes the tone of a letter? Please help I’ve already missed 4 and if I miss another one I won’t pass!

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Answer:

The tone of the letter should be confident. Brisk would be the best possible answer. (If im wrong then im extremely sorry) But it should be Brisk.

Explanation:

Right 3 to 5 sentences about your predictions of the future... What will change, what will stay the same?

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Answer: In the future, everyone will be vacinated and things will slowly start to go back to normal. Our lives will be the way it was before the pandemic started. Those who were affected will recover and for those who’s family members passed away, will forever be remembered.

Explanation:

Read these lines from "The Song of Wandering Aengus." And pluck till time and times are done, The silver apples of the moon, The golden apples of the sun. How does Aengus's desire to pluck the apples affect the meaning in the poem?

A.It represents Aengus's desire to capture the beauty he saw when he was young.
B. It suggests the youthful passion Aengus feels about his renewed life.
C. It reflects Aengus's disappointment in wandering for so many years.
D. It reflects the frustration Aengus feels about being idle.

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Answer -

it is A because he describes it with the moon and sun

Aengus, the Celtic god of love and beauty, sings "The Song of Wandering Aengus." In Yeats' poem, however, he does not appear to be a god. He just appears to be a typical guy.

Correct option is A.

He does, after all, go fishing, be deceived, and get old like the rest of us. Aengus goes fishing in a hazel grove at the beginning of the poem. He fashions a fishing pole from a hazel stick, attaches a berry to it, and then dips it into a stream. He strikes gold and lands a trout.

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Is "why should we knock under and go with the stream" a metaphor or simile?

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Answer:

I think its a metaphor?

Explanation:

It is a metaphor.
Remember that a simile uses ‘as’ or ‘like’.

which situation would most likely create tension in a story
a.daves flight has been cancelled and he might miss the birth of his son
b.sarah knows that her dogs, bennie and red,enjoy going to the park
c.catherine decides to buy balloons for her daughters birthday party
d.pete switches to a low fat diet and successfully lowers his cholesterol

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Answer: A. Daves flight has been cancelled and he might miss the birth of his son

Explanation:

Tension brings excitement and curiosity to a story. When there is tension in a story, the readers anticipate and look forward to what'll happen next.

The situation would most likely create tension in a story is "Daves flight has been cancelled and he might miss the birth of his son''. This is because the readers want to know what'll happen next.

What can you include about the countries of Europe by looking at this map

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Can’t see the map you forgot it

Novel: Lord of the Flies; On page 8, Ralph puts on his grey shirt and notices that it was “strangely pleasing” to wear the shirt. The grey shirt represents a tie to society, order, and civilization. We know Ralph is so excited to not be limited by rules. Why do you think he felt comfort while wearing the grey shirt?

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Answer: c

Explanation:

Answer:

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Explanation:

Using the information in part A, write a response analyzing how the author develops Maggie’s character in A Good Place for Maggie. Be sure to answer these questions in your response:

What can you infer about Maggie?
What details reveal these characteristics?​
How does the author develop Maggie’s character?

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on:

Answer:

In the excerpt from A Good Place for Maggie, Maggie is driving away from her home in Los Angeles. Maggie describes the city as "a terrible place" full of "processed air" and "car exhaust." Maggie's description of the city develops Maggie's character as someone who does not enjoy the city and is most likely unhappy living there.

Explanation: Plato answer :)

Answer:

What I can infer about Maggie is that she's a young teen that cares a lot about her family and friends but she's unhappy living in the city of L.A and her dad died so she ran away and is going to her grandpa's place. Details that reveal these characteristics: "she had begun to think that maybe being sixteen and a half didn’t make her that smart; maybe a trip like this was a little much for her." "Dad would be proud of me. I’m doing what is right for me. Oh, I’ll miss my friends, especially Mim and Lorena. I’ll even miss Ryan." “Jase is a good enough stepfather, but I told you both how I felt about that condo in downtown L.A. and you guys went ahead and bought it. It’s a terrible place. All there is to breathe inside is processed air and outside, car exhaust.” The author uses mostly an indirect characterization to develop Maggie's character.

Explanation:

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The first answer.

The paragraph talks about how their ready to immediately get to work.

Which statement best paraphrases the sentence in lines 20-21?
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A. I often try to rise above my circumstances.
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B. My intentions can be greater than my abilities.
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C. Success occasionally comes to me out of the blue.
D. My imagination rises and soars like the birds. uy

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Answer: B

Explanation:

Which piece of evidence from source 2 most conflicts with Vicki's claim that
she didn't steal the prized necklace?
d Capture
SOURCE 1: From the testimony of Vicki Mays: I'm not a thief! On the
Sunday afternoon that the prized necklace was stolen, I was at Joe's
Butcher shop. I bought eight Kobe beef steaks at 3:00, and these are
the exact words I said to the butcher: "I love this stuff."
SOURCE 2: Police profile of Vicki Mays: Age 22. Height 5'5". Born in
Greenview, Illinois, to Martha and Jonathan Mays, lifelong vegetarian,
devoted sister of Gabriella Mays. Member of the Northwest Central
University Chess Club, fan of the Pittsburgh Steelers. Keeps to herself
and enjoys solo whitewater rafting.

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Answer:

A. She's a lifelong vegetarian

Explanation:

She said she went to the butchers and told them or him that "She loves this stuff", even though on the police profile it says that she's a lifelong vegetarian.

Compare and contrast boarding school and boot camp using the organizer
below. Include at least four bullet points for each box.
Differences

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Answer: Well boot camp you get disapline and camp you learn more things like to survive.  

Explanation:

there is a diffrence boot is for kids to learn to listen and camp to do fun activities.

1. What are three qualities that make this poetry?​

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Answer:

make what poetry

Explanation:

a poetry is made with massive amount of figures of speech such as metonomy, similie , personification , alliteration etc secondly its rythem scheme abab or abba and many more.

to end with yoir topic should be worthfull means that whatever you write or convey to others should be attractfull.

poetry like The nations strength is a rheotic one written by Ralph Waldo Emerson is a best example

Now it’s time to discuss your analysis. Partner with at least one other person, such as a classmate or your teacher, to discuss your analysis. Take turns sharing and discussing the notes you took in part B. Listen respectfully and ask thoughtful questions to clarify your understanding of the text.


After your discussion, reflect on the experience by describing in 75 to 100 words how the discussion helped you develop a better understanding of the argument.

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Answer:

After discussing my analysis with a partner, I had a clearer understanding of the connection between the message, purpose, and claim. I also better understood how the author used rhetorical strategies to develop the claim.

Explanation: sample answer for edmentum

Answer:

The discussion with a partner helped me better understand the details and evidence that are credible versus noncredible. It also helped me identify more implied meanings in the passage

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Review the texts “Understanding the Benefits and Risks of Screen Time for Adolescents” and “Screen Time Guidelines for Teens.” Select details from each text and come up with a conclusion based on them. Be sure that each individual detail combines with the others to support your conclusion. Write at least one conclusion from each article.

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Answer:

I should be sure that I turn devices off before I go to sleep so that I can get enough uninterrupted sleep at night.

I can use my screen time to make a difference in my community and learn about current events.

Explanation:

EDMENTUM answer so rephrase!!!

Understanding the Benefits and Risks.

As per the question the reviews of the text on the understanding of the benefits and the risks of screen time for the adolescents and the screen time as per the guidelines or the teens. The details of the text tell about the tips to use a screen at the time of night.

Thus the answer is to track the amount of exposure from the screen.

The text states the positives and negatives of screen use by adolescents. The benefits include the new ideas, staying updated, participating in the community from a distance. The negative is a risk of developing a sleep disorder. Disorder to spine, neck, and back.

Thus they should keep in mind it does not affect them badly.

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anybody know what answer fats pls

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Answer:

Threatning

Explanation:

According to Jerfferson, what has been the king's attitude toward the laws of the
colonies? Why is that attitude an important factor in the decision to declare
independence?

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Answer:

He has been contemptuous; he has ignored colonists' efforts to make their own laws. He is also callous in that he reveals no concern for the colonists. ... His attitude reveals how he is unfit to be a king.

It galvanizes the colonies to feel even more resentment towards the king and strive to gain their independence.The signers of the Declaration knew that their announcement could mean war with powerful, well-equipped Britain.

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Explanation:

What groups are affected by racial justice? And what groups are affected by voting rights?

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Answer:

People affected by racial justice are black people

Explanation:

and the people under 18 are not able to vote and back then that was the same for women.

Katya shoved her hands deep in her pockets as she walked. The cold night air seemed to push her forward, and she just let herself be rushed along. She didn't know where she was going, and she didn't care. She had just said goodbye to her best friend, Irina, and the empty city street, as cold and bleak as the far side of the moon, was no match for the emptiness in Katya's heart. Irina was moving forward in her life as a high school graduate headed for a prestigious university. Unlike me, Katya thought. I can't even imagine what I'll do next.
A bus stop on the corner of the street caught Katya's attention. The bus line had been out of service in her town for years, and she couldn't remember seeing a bus stop on this corner before. I guess it's as good a place to wait as any, she thought as she sat down on the bench. She didn't know what she was waiting for. A sign to guide her into the future, perhaps. Maybe she would just sit on the park bench and wait for the sun to come up.
Suddenly, a light flashed in Katya's eyes. She turned to see a bus pulling up to the stop. The bus was painted a plain gray, and Katya could not see a company name or destination written anywhere. Instead, it seemed as dull and blank as her future. There were no passengers on the bus—only a driver looking out at her impassively. The door opened, and Katya felt a rush of wind at her back.
"Coming aboard, miss?" asked the driver. Katya felt a chill run up her spine as she stood. She climbed aboard the bus and took a seat in the back. As she looked out the window, she could see light streaking the sky to the east. The morning light traced a pattern across the sky, and the sun's gentle hands began to change the view outside Katya's window from an empty wasteland into a bustling, friendly city. No matter what happens next, it will be a fresh start. That is just what I need, Katya thought as the bus moved toward the light.
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Which of the following is used as a symbol of hope in this story?
A.the rising sun
B.the cold wind
C.the bus bench
D.the bus driver

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Answer: I say A.the rising sun!

Answer:

Explanation:

The Answer is A


What name does Jordan Baker mention that grabs Daisy s interest?what might this foreshadow?

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Answer:

Gatsby

Explanation:

The way Daisy reacts towards Gatsby's name when having a conversation with Nick and Jordan, it makes it seem like she has had a past with Gatsby, and she feels uncomfortable with people knowing about it.

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5. Choose the answer that best matches the word in italics.

Marcus was shouting at the nurse because he was so delirious.

O angry

O exhausted

O feverish

O frustrated

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Answer:

angry

Explanation:

Angry is the best match for the word in italics. Thus option A is correct.

What is a sentence?

A sentence can be defined as the part where the phrase and the words are. This often contains a subject and a predicate. For a sentence, it needs to be grammatically correct. Also, there should be proper punctuation marks that are needed in a sentence. It can contain a noun or a pronoun. The sentence helps in communicating the thoughts.

Due to a fever or mental disorientation, unable to comprehend or communicate clearly: She seemed delirious and had a constant fever. exceedingly ecstatic or pleased When the team returned home, its supporters greeted them with delirium.

A major alteration in mental capacity is delirium. Thinking becomes muddled and one loses awareness of their environment as a result. Usually, the problem develops quickly - in a matter of days or weeks. Delirium frequently has one or more causes, but not always. Therefore, option A is the correct option.

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Do you like the book HAMLET and why

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Answer:

Personally I thought it was really confusing. It had a bunch of characters and it was hard to follow at some points because of the language used by Shakespeare.

Explanation:

yeah

Answer:

I like it because it is interestin and fun.

Explanation:

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It's: Pullman describes Lyra’s capture at line 24: “like a fly being trussed by a spider”. What kind of picture does this simile create in your mind?
If u can thank u very much, I think it will be take of you 5 minutes max

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Answer:

This comparison creates the image of a completely helpless victim.

Explanation:

The author of the sentence shown in the question above used a metaphor to compare Lyra to a fly that was tied to a spider's web. The spider is a predator of the fly, which once trapped in the spider's web, cannot escape, becoming a completely defenseless prey that cannot be released.

In this case, the metaphor shows Lyra's weakness in relation to her captors, which she has no chance of escaping.

Recommendation about television

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Answer:

i like to watch impratical jokers and the carbonaro effect on truTV

Explanation:

Hello! It depends what genre you like.

I’d recommend for thriller/horror
-Chilling Adventures Of Sabrina
-Sightless
-Stranger Things
-The Devil All The Time
-Dangerous Lies
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For love and romance I’d recommend
-To all the boys I’ve loved before 1 &2
-Enola Holmes (Kinda Mystery)
-Sierra Burgess is a loser

For Comedy:

-I am not okay with this
-Never have I ever

DRAMATIC IRONY, FORESHADOWING, IMAGERY, OR FLASHBACK?

PARIS: Happily met, my lady and my wife!

JULIET: That may be, sir, when I may be a wife.

PARIS: That may be must be, love, on Thursday next.

JULIET: What must be shall be.

FRIAR LAURENCE: That's a certain text.

PARIS: Come you to make confession to this father?

JULIET: To answer that, I should confess to you.

PARIS: Do not deny to him that you love me.

JULIET: I will confess to you that I love him.

PARIS: So will ye, I am sure, that you love me.

JULIET: If I do so, it will be of more price,
Being spoke behind your back, than to your face.

PARIS: Poor soul, thy face is much abused with tears.

JULIET: The tears have got small victory by that;
For it was bad enough before their spite.

PARIS: Thou wrong'st it, more than tears, with that report.

JULIET: That is no slander, sir, which is a truth;
And what I spake, I spake it to my face.

PARIS: Thy face is mine, and thou hast slander'd it.

JULIET: It may be so, for it is not mine own.
Are you at leisure, holy father, now;
Or shall I come to you at evening mass?

FRIAR LAURENCE: My leisure serves me, pensive daughter, now.
My lord, we must entreat the time alone.

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this is dramatic irony! :D i’m pretty sure, if not i’m sorry! but tht is the option left & we know something that whoever she loves doesn’t , like i said i’m not sure

Steinbeck's overall purpose in writing The Grapes of Wrath was to:
A. affect a reader's emotions.
B. ignore a reader's emotions.
C. lull a reader into complacency.
D. reveal a reader's biases.

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Answer: The Grapes of Wrath, the best-known novel by John Steinbeck, published in 1939. It evokes the harshness of the Great Depression and arouses sympathy for the struggles of migrant farmworkers. The book came to be regarded as an American classic.

It think it would be A.

Answer:

A.

Explanation:

He wanted to affect his reader's emotions. Hope it helps : )

where is this quote from "You have been the blindness of them all."​

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On a Certain Blindness in Human Beings
William James
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